They day I woke with Super powers....It was a cold Saturday morning.I could feel it.It was past 9 : 00. Then my ear twitched.I scratched my hand.Then the doorbell rang.Ding, Doing,Ding, Doing."Come here look there is a parcel for you" My Mum shouted with her highest voice."coming" I said back at her.I wanted her to think that I was going to be dashing down the stairs but really I was going very very slowly down the stairs."I 'm not sure who it's from or where it's from.I just nodded at her and took the heavy parcel up the stairs.And you could not believe what was inside the box.It was a bottle of milk."who would sent something like this".I said to myself.Then there was a note saying drink the bottle of milk.I just drinked like a normal milk not noticing that the milk sparkled as there was glitter inside it.
The next day I woke up early.I never wake up before 9 : 00.That's my maximum time.And then it suddenly turned Monday.Well I didn't think it was a little awkward.My Mum called again "darling darling wake up".I went downstairs to brush my teeth .It felt like a normal day,have a shower,brush teeth,Except when I went to school.There was a diving contest.When I waited in the line it was finally my turn.I jumped in the pool.Sea creatures were suddenly surrounding me.I was scared.I quickly jumped out of the water.And after the diving contest it was soon play time.I was running with my friends when I slipped.My head was spinning around and around.My friends were lifting me up and caring me to my classroom.Soon it was maths time.My head was spinning around so could not really understand what the teacher was saying.Then she asked me a question
But I was to dizzy to answer it so she called my parents.They took me home.After a few hours I woke up and there was a mail for me.It looked like an ancient scroll.It eco through my head.It said that your are the guardian of the ocean.To be coutinude.....
Kia ora Sneha,
ReplyDeleteI like your writing this week. I think it was very creative that we don't have a clear picture what your characters superpowers are, and that you have ended the story with a cliff hanger.
Next time make sure you add your N.L and R.T for your writing. This can be found on the teacher slides. You should also try and split you first paragraph in two as it is quite long. For example, I would have started a new paragraph after the sentence about drinking the milk.