This is my writing for this week.I enjoyed writing it.It took 2 days to finish it. As was a big story.It is about a girl who hates vegetables.And then a mad Dr.DR GREEN PLANT who hates meat.You will find more once you have read the story
Friday, September 17, 2021
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This is my healthy plate for one of our reading activitys.I went on google and found pictures.And then I added them on my plate.Which food ...
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Hi everyone.My name is Sneha I go to Papakura central school. My Class is the kahikatea hub.Hope you learn more about me.Bye
Kia ora Sneha,
ReplyDeleteI like how you included your plan in the slideshow before you started your writing. I thought you had some pretty great ideas, such as an alien planet being the reason everyone on Earth was vegetarian. I also like how the main character was the only person not vegetarian and it was up to her to turn everyone back to normal.
Something I would work on next time is reading over your writing again. I have noticed there are a few spelling errors and you have also used the wrong tense with some words, e.g."thinked" instead of "thought".
I also think you could have added a bit more detail into HOW Clara convinced the aliens to turn everyone back to normal as it felt like your story ended suddenly.
Thank you for telling me that I have to fix them and I will
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