Writing(Correction of space attack)

 

 Space attack 

Part :1

Wednesday, 17 March 2021

Long time ago from outer space a lost planet called Flames was home to nothing.The next  planet Flames was a plane called the lost ever and was the same thing except it was filled with aliens.One day 2 aliens named  Bill & lill were off to explore planet Flames but they didn’t know that it could pull metal down and squash it into pieces.Well that's it’s only strength I guess .’’AHHHHH what’s happening” said Bill ‘’I don’t know but Caption Blob said that it could take metal down as it was a  magnet’’ said Lill “Oh no “ We are going to crash for good”.They crashed for good.

BOOOM!!!!

To be continued in the next part.

This is a  sneak -peek of part 2 

"?“I don’t feel to good”said Bill.”come we have to discover is anything lives here”said Lill. “o-kay”.Gas appeared and made Lill and Bill sleep.   

Date:Thursday 25 march 2021

Correction of space attack:

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 Space attack  Correction

Part :1

Wednesday, 17 March 2021

Long time ago from outer space a lost planet called Flames ,an old planet  which was home to nothing.The next  planet to Flames was a plane called the lost ever and was the opposite.One day 2 animals named  Bill & lill were off to explore planet Flames but they didn’t know that it could pull metal down and squash it into pieces.Well that's it’s only strength I guess .’’AHHHHH what’s happening” said Bill ‘’I don’t know but Caption Blob said that it could take metal down as it was a  magnet’’ said Lill “Oh no “ We are going to crash for good”.They crashed for good.

BOOOM!!!!

To be continued in the next part.

This is a  sneak -peek of part 2 

“I don’t feel too good”said Bill.”Come we have to discover if anything lives here”said Lill. “O-kay”. A few hours of exploring,  they saw gas appear made Lill and Bill  into deep sleep.